SPEECH EVALUATION ON "FALL AND MOVE ON"Congratulations. You have achieved your speech objective. You have varied your voice, pitch, rate and tones according to the content of your entire speech. Well done.
Smile. TM Susan,
Smile. TM Susan,
Your speech title, "Fall and move on" is direct and straightforward. You began with a story, a great fall incident and slowly relate it to the other three personal falls experience in broke off relationship with your boyfriend, other relationship and your business failure. Your content is well crafted. Smooth and easy to follow. I like your choice of picture word, which was able to help me to figure out how severe is your fall. I can imagine its impact, if not for your "soft part" to cushion the gravity of your fall and "hard part" of your jaw prevented you from spending millions of dollars' on facial surgery. With your hand gesture of pointing the soft part at the front of your body and your jaw, you have directed my focus on how these two key areas. How they reduced the impact of the fall on you. I must say that you are creative in this sense. Well done and keep up your good work.
Another point I like about your speech is the way you applied the rule of three to describe your emotion after the falls. Devastated, Despaired and Depressed. These words generate much greater gravity in term of magnitude.
To have a greater impact, perhaps you may change your title to "Fall, Stand and Move On". Follow by gesture of a fall, stand up and move on. With this, it is more memorable and easier to stick on.
Your eye contacts are good, though not balance. You had been more inclined to build eye contacts with the audiences at your right hand side. To complete and have a wider coverage, perhaps you too have eye contacts with your audiences at your left hand side especially when you raised those questions in your speech.
One last and important point is that you show your angry facial expression of anger and raised your tone to reflect your anger. Soften tones of voice when you are depressed.
Well done, TM Susan. Give HER another round of well deserved applause.